Write Your Novel In A Year – Week 36: 3 Must-Have Scenes That Reveal Plot


Goal setting
  1. Write the three key plot scenes for your novel.

Breaking it down

1. Portmanteau scenes

A portmanteau is a rather old-fashioned term for a suitcase. My grandmother used to have one on top of her wardrobe. It was usually a hard-shell suitcase that opened into two equal parts, and lined in a silky material.

Of course, a portmanteau term is also a something that combines two different words – a mash-up that makes sense, like ‘bromance’ or ‘frenemy’. In much the same way, you can have a single scene that ticks two boxes.

The scene can either reveal character and plot, or plot and setting, or plot and theme.  For example, say you have a pop star hoping to make a comeback. She is at the offices of her record label for a meeting with an executive, walking down a corridor, and sees someone taking down her framed platinum record and replacing it with the platinum record of a younger, hotter star.

That would be a cool way to show theme and plot – and even a bit of setting.

You could perhaps have a scene that shows a character – who just happens to be a vampire – passing a pretty but drugged-out prostitute on a dark street. He doesn’t believe in attacking easy prey and even gives the poor creature some money. This shows his character and his values. As he is about to turn the corner, he spots the prostitute being attacked by a gang – but by the time he gets to her, she is dying. He has no choice but to turn her into a vampire too. This could be an important plot point – she could turn out to be his love interest, or even an antagonist.

The more I think about it, I believe most scenes should be earning their keep – and doing more than one thing.  A good question to ask is: What else could this scene accomplish?

2. Time cuts

Sometimes you want to show time in a vivid way in your story – you either want to compress time or stretch it out.  This is when pacing can help you when constructing a scene. The time cut is something we can loan from the world of screenwriting.

For example, in my novel, I want to show how long and punishing a photo-shoot can be for my main character, Jenna.  At the start, I show her in jeans and boots, hair loose and styled, sipping her first take-away cappuccino.

I can then use a time cut. It’s two hours later and Jenna is barefoot, hair tied back in clumsy ponytail, stacking empty Styrofoam cups as she drains a bottle of mineral water.  This is a good way to move a scene along quickly.

If you want to ‘stretch’ time, you can use a similar technique. Think of it as a camera on time lapse.

In another scene, I have my antagonist, Monty, suffering from insomnia. He lies on his bed, staring at the window. He sees the window ‘shade’ from black to grey to blue. He starts the scene clothed and ends the scene naked – a carousel of songs also spools through his brain as he listens to his iPod.

3. The action build

The idea behind the action build is to write just with action – limiting the amount of dialogue or interior thought you use.

It’s where ‘showing’ rather than ‘telling’ becomes the focus of a scene. It’s about building tension while keeping your reader a little bit in the dark.

For example: you could show a woman scrubbing herself obsessively in the shower, drying off while she shivers. She swallows some tranquillisers before flossing and brushing her teeth. She enters the bedroom – where her partner lies. Not looking at him, she turns on a noisy dryer. Her partner doesn’t stir or wake as she styles her hair, gets dressed in an amazing outfit, applies her make-up. At the end of the scene, she calmly picks up her cell phone, punches in a number. When the call is answered, she says, ‘I’d like to report a crime. I just murdered my husband.’

This is a great way to start a scene – or even a novel – as it focuses on just what the character is doing and the reader has to guess why they’re doing this.

Timelock — 3 to 6 hours

Spend an hour or two writing each of these key scenes.

5 Quick Hacks
  1. For an action build, draw out the action as a storyboard – even if you use stick figures or images you cut from magazines. This will force you to focus only on physical actions.
  2. For a time cut scene, write down a minute-by-minute sequence of events for your character – try an important or crucial scene. Look at what elements you can cut out so that the pace picks up.
  3. Take a scene and sequel from your novel and challenge yourself to write both in one single scene.
  4. Just for fun, have two characters in your story forced to share a single suitcase. What would they pack? What would they argue about?
  5. Take a train or taxi ride. Jot down the most interesting things you see flash past the window. Could you use this for a time cut or time lapse scene in a story or your novel?

Pin it, quote it, believe it:

‘I don’t praise plots as accurate representations of life, but as ways of keeping readers reading.’ — Kurt Vonnegut, Jr.

Look out for next week’s instalment of Write Your Novel In A Year: Week 37: Rules Of The Game

 

 by Anthony Ehlers

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This article has 3 comments

  1. Crystal Miller

    Great ideas to help me along

  2. Darlene Deluca

    Love your time cut ideas!

  3. Anthony Ehlers

    Thanks, Crystal and Darlene. Both your names together would make great characters in a roadtrip movie! 🙂

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