I have been writing about dialogue these past few weeks.
Today, I want to talk about adverbs and why you should try to avoid them.
us how it was done. When I talk about adverbs I want you to be pay close
attention to the words that end in –ly, namely adverbs of manner. Instead of using these, I want you to try to use
verbs, but not any old verb will do. I want you to use strong verbs, for example, stride instead of walk, sprint or race instead of run.
character well. Think of the difference between a woman who strides and a woman
who shuffles. Each verb creates a different person or a different scene.
redundant or could be replaced by a strong verb. Adverbs are the tequila of writing. There is no such thing
as one tequila and there is no such thing as one adverb. Once you have used
one, more will sneak in. Be careful.
awesome. Use it. Don’t replace it with words like admonished or exclaimed.
Stephen King recommends using them only 10% of the time. It’s good advice. Said
is invisible to a reader.
than said. I used the prompt: ‘Keep your morals away from me’.
“Don’t do it.” Alice demanded angrily.“Keep your morals away from me.” Janet said snidely as she
stood over John, tightly tied up in the corner.“You’ve never minded my morals before.” Alice retorted
sarcastically.“Well, I mind them now.” Janet said irritably as she
steadied the gun, the weight of it uncomfortably heavy in her inexperienced
hand.“How inconvenient for you that I am here then. Please, just drop the gun, Janet,” Alice said as
seriously as possible. “We both know you are not going to shoot him.”“I am going to shoot him. I hate him.” Janet said bitterly.
Her eyes narrowed dangerously.John whimpered through his gag and pleaded with his eyes.“You don’t hate him, you love him. You always have.” Alice
said, exasperated.“No, you are wrong. I used to love him.” She said as she
squeezed the trigger.
“Don’t do it.” Alice grabbed Janet’s arm.“Keep your morals away from me.” Janet pulled away and stood
in front of him, trussed up and pathetic in the corner. She steadied the gun, the weight of it
uncomfortable and heavy in her inexperienced hand.“You’ve never minded my morals before.” Alice said, folding
her arms.“Well, I mind them now.” Janet said, as she levelled the
weapon.“How inconvenient for you that I am here then. Just, drop
the gun,” Alice stood in front of Janet and took a step closer so that the gun
pressed against her breastbone. “We both know you are not going to shoot him.”“I am going to shoot him. I hate him.” They watched him squirm. He whimpered through
his gag.“You don’t hate him, you love him. You always have.”Alice shoved Janet out the way. “No, you are wrong. I used
to love him,” she said as she stepped over her sister. She smiled as she
squeezed the trigger.
from creating unwieldly words that your reader will have to reread. Look at your
last piece of dialogue and try using an action instead of an adverb.
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by Mia Botha
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